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I found this browsing the Star Wars tag and….
I’m pretty sure Twi’leks can’t dislocate their spines at will and I have no clue what the Sith chick is doing.
I’m really curious what this looks like if you continued their bodies beyond this panel. What is Twi’lek girl (is that Aayla?) doing? Where are they standing? What does the ground look like? Are they fighting inside a sphere?
Okay this one I had to do. This is also for my April Drawing day 3 to boot.SO!
Pic One: Figuring Out WTF is Going On
As you can see, the pose is really weird once you try to figure out how they’re standing. It’s pretty obvious that the artist didn’t crop from a larger image, they just threw the two fighters into a space that doesn’t really let them breathe.
Also- boob flounder, redhead chick isn’t even looking at Twi’lek girl, neck and shoulder WTF’s.
Pic Two: Sticking to the Source
This was me attempting to stick to the same composition/general positioning while fixing the weird anatomy. It’s not bad, serviceable even but I had one more try for something I think might be better.
Pic Three: Let’s See What We Can Do
I wanted the same feeling of the red girl bringing the force line down on the Twi’lek so I put the Twi’lek on her knees, trying for a blocking sort of positioning (note: I don’t know anything about fighting but I did have the sense to google for ‘sword fighting’ or something similar to get an idea of what is in the realm of possible if not perfect). I like my version, but of course I would, right? ;)
Hi there! Love your redraws! :) There’s one or two things I’d like to point out about your Twi’lek’s kneeling stance that look wrong to me as someone who’s practiced kendo for about two years. The Twi’lek’s light saber’s angle doesn’t look right. It should be tilted up, not down - right now, if the Sith hits her with enough force, her own saber’s going to go down into her own head. I’d suggest lowering her arms a little bit and angling the sword up. (You can look up pictures of jodan kamae to get a better idea of what I’m talking about.)
Also, her left foot would probably not be bent like that. If you keep your foot bent under you while you’re kneeling and someone else hits you with any force from the front as the Sith is about to, you’re going to be sent down and backwards, right onto that ankle and foot, and with it bent like that, you’d probably break something. The top of her foot should be flat on the ground, and her toes should be pointing out behind her, so that if her body is forced backwards, her butt will end up resting on her heel instead of crushing it downwards and hurting her foot. Try kneeling down and doing it yourself, to help you see and feel the difference between a bent foot and straight foot. (I can draw all this out later if you don’t understand what I mean.)
Hope this makes sense and helps you :)
I’m going to go from here and see what I would do with this. Here’s my view of what’s happening in the rest of this image:
Okay, in all seriousness, I’m going to tackle this one one pose at a time. In the original, they do look like they’re dancing. It’s not clear what the dynamic is between the two characters. I think the Sith should be attacking the Twilek jedi. Right?
Following the same idea as pariahsdream, I found my perspective in this scene and reworked the pose to make it a real attack. And yeah, I may have made a silly cartoon face on my sketch, but the facial expression on the original is all wrong. She looks stoned, not battle-enraged. Note the pinch and stretch counter actions on the body in the redraw, which are nowhere but in the arms on the original. (One good thing about the original is that the breasts are actually raised with the arms, so point for the artist.)
If she’s on the offensive, her adversary should be on the defensive:
And that’s how I’d handle this image. The Jedi’s actually going into a crouch, and will a split second later have brought her own saber horizontally above her head to block the downward strike of the Sith. I haven’t drawn the sword up because the opposing swing hasn’t started yet! It’s all in the timing of the action.
Hm, need to adjust the direction of the eyes on the Sith so she actually glares at the Jedi, not at her sword arm…
It’s so good to read this before I go to figure drawing class today. The stretch/pinch indications especially help—I need to remember that to stress the positioning of my posing.
